Write a dramatic scene between two people in which each has a secret and neither of them reveals the secret to the other OR TO THE READER.
"You never listen to me!" Kindyl shouted at Magnus.
"That's because you never make any sense. Always talking in riddles and cryptic remarks, it's like you know something the rest of us don't and you're too proud to just say it."
Kindyl opened her mouth to retort but then quickly snapped it shut. The truth was she did know something the rest didn't but she couldn't tell them, not now, not after what the old crone had said at the county fair. The secret was there in her eyes Magnus could see it surface and sink before the words ever left her mouth. Why wouldn't she tell him? Didn't she trust him after all this time to protect her? Kindyl looked down trying to use her eyelashes to shield the truth from Magnus's prying eyes. She had always been told that her eyes were the most expressive, powerful, part of her.Unfortunately it also meant she was a very bad liar.
Magnus stared at the top of Kindyl's head in frustration. He was tired and frustrated with the cryptic remarks. Wasn't it hard enough having to live with the knowledge of where they were going without having to deal with this puzzle of a woman? Kindyl was close enough that he could smell the raspberry shampoo she used to wash her hair. If he leaned a fraction of an inch closer he'd be able to rest his chin on the top of her hair and breath her sent in. Just as he was about to give in to the desire Kindyl raised her head and opened her mouth to speak.
"Magnus I need to tell you something but the others, they can't know OK, you can't tell them."
"Kindyl what is so bad that we can't tell the others?" Was is possible? did she know the truth of where they were headed? Just as Kindyl was about to tell him what was so bad there was a flash of light and rush of wind they turned to see what had caused it when a huge force of air blasted them to the ground. Magnus wouldn't find out about Kindyl's secret tonight or before it was too late to change the outcome.
ooooh and that my dear is how you capture a reader's attention. Yeah for your superior skills!
ReplyDeleteThank you Elizabeth. Sometimes when I get stuck on a story or am not sure how to progress it I go back and do some of the creative writing exercises I learned in college. They help me get pas that whole writers block thing.
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